When you are around
I feel I can take on the
World
When you speak I
Feel every word you
Speak
When you move
I feel every movement
You make
When you touch my hand
I feel that I can fly or just
Go on for miles
When your heart beats
I feel everyone of your
Heartbreaks
When you laugh
I can hear the tension in
Your voice
When you leave
my heart anticipates
The moment you will return
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When
by Babygirl_4_lyfe on Wed Oct 12, 2005 11:20 pm
Last edited by Babygirl_4_lyfe on Thu Oct 20, 2005 2:20 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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by bradmurphyackermanms on Wed Oct 12, 2005 11:22 pm
Amber, I think you have your E-CARD!!! Now that was beautiful. You really outdid yourself on that one. I like.
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by Babygirl_4_lyfe on Wed Oct 12, 2005 11:24 pm
what r u going to request it to be one?
!WOW! ty i think this is one of my better ones
!WOW! ty i think this is one of my better ones
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by Deborah Lynne on Wed Oct 12, 2005 11:34 pm
I agree with Brad. This is definitely your best work so far! I love it ! I love it ! I love it ! 
Deborah Lynne
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His name is Jesus Christ.
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by Babygirl_4_lyfe on Wed Oct 12, 2005 11:36 pm
haha lol okies inty mom but no ones gonna do the whole request thing even if it is my best work yet but ya know thats not what im here for (the E-CARD) im here for friends and most of all to write poetry (even if it does all suck!)
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by norman on Thu Oct 13, 2005 12:17 am
kiddo there is nothing that sucks about poetry. it all comes from the heart just keep going energizer...lol
TO SOME WE SEEM LIKE A GENIOUS
TO SOME WE SEEM LIKE A FOOL
BUT OUR WORDS OF POETRY
IS JUST OUR EXPESSION TOOL
TO SOME WE SEEM LIKE A FOOL
BUT OUR WORDS OF POETRY
IS JUST OUR EXPESSION TOOL
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by Babygirl_4_lyfe on Thu Oct 13, 2005 1:49 am
ty (i meant my poetry not anyone elses silly)<thats for uncle norman
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by Deborah Lynne on Sat Oct 15, 2005 12:04 am
What's wrong?
Deborah Lynne
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I am not perfect. I am a work in progress. I have the greatest carpenter who ever
lived repairing me. Do you know Him?
His name is Jesus Christ.
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I am not perfect. I am a work in progress. I have the greatest carpenter who ever
lived repairing me. Do you know Him?
His name is Jesus Christ.
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by scripter7 on Sat Oct 15, 2005 12:59 am
Amber, It comes from your heart,We can all see that.YOU have it kid.You do great work.The beautifull thing is that we all do the same thing DIFFERENTLY.THX for being here.
speak out and touch someone
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by Babygirl_4_lyfe on Sat Oct 15, 2005 1:28 am
ty scripter.........idk inty mom im just really sad bc my poetry sucks
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by Deborah Lynne on Sat Oct 15, 2005 1:45 am
Your poetry does not suck!!!!!!! I love it! Are you trying to tell me I have no taste in poetry?.....lol. You are an awesome writer and you're not gonna convince me otherwise...so there!!!!!! 
Deborah Lynne
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I am not perfect. I am a work in progress. I have the greatest carpenter who ever
lived repairing me. Do you know Him?
His name is Jesus Christ.
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I am not perfect. I am a work in progress. I have the greatest carpenter who ever
lived repairing me. Do you know Him?
His name is Jesus Christ.
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Re: When
by Lifeistoshort on Sat Oct 15, 2005 7:20 am
Amber stop being so hard on yourself i thought your poem was beautiful. 
Kim
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